Are you one of the addicted to shopping ? why you are one of them ? nowadays a lot of people addict to shopping, they like to go shopping without they need it. They think it is fine to shopping in any time and buy any things they want. However it is a big problem and the number of shopaholic is increasing. This essay will discuss two main problems of this subject and will find a two solutions for it. 
The partner by John Grisham
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Good structure for your introduction - great hook, bridge and thesis statement. Some language problems though:
ردحذف1) one of the addicted to X "are you addicted to shopping? Why?"
2) nowadays should be capitalized
3) addict to shopping should be 'are addicted to'
4) 'without they need it' is incorrect
5) to shopping should be 'to go shopping'
6) any things should be anything
7) shopaholic should be plural
8) a two solutions - a means 1